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Comment on publication: Little secret
I read. Thank you for such a high appreciation of their creativity.
Comment on publication: Competition results for March 2016
Cheers to Man! Very happy to see him in the winners. In my opinion, there is no equal to him. Anyway, I did not read.
Comment on publication: The path to you ...
Wow, what a verse "in the subject"))) Very cool) Thank you))
Comment on publication: Bland face. Part 2
Finally I got to continue))) I have been sluggishly active lately, I apologize))) But what I need, I always keep at the mark and will definitely read, sooner or later)))
The continuation was not in vain. I did not think that it was tightened. I like it)
I only wonder what will happen next? ...
Will you jump?)
And the crown frazochki, epithets and phrases, as always, brought the brightness of the image and humor)))
Comment on publication: This is so like you ... Part 1
One thing is waiting, and another is to scare away an orgasm! Evil tedious mozgolubezhka guaranteed)
Comment on publication: Bland face. Part 1
I meant that if there is a continuation of dates for the heroes, the doll will hang itself with anguish)))
Comment on publication: This is so like you ... Part 1
Hmm ...
Author, do you have any idea what it is - to cut off a female orgasm, knock her whole mind, and then selfishly go to the blowjob?
Even when I read, my mood was so spoiled that I wanted to get pissed off and stomp my foot. I imagine what I would do in reality with such a lover ...
Disappointed. I do not give a rating.
Although, moving away from the nuances, you can read. From the point of view of the text itself.
Comment on publication: Forest keeper
I look, with comments not a lot ...
I will try to present my impression. Immediately warn you - not my topic. I don't like computer games, I consider virtual reality to be evil. But I cannot but admit that this is an interesting and promising thing in some areas. For example, as in this story - the completion of certain abilities and feelings for people with disabilities.
First criticism.
Well written too concise, crumpled for such a topic. It would be possible to focus on a certain psychologism, reveal the state of the hero, show him “before” getting into the virtual world. Surely it would be quite dramatic and interesting.
Then. In my opinion, not quite the game was chosen for this topic. Virtual reality in this case should not have been a typical game with goblins elves and war games. It was superfluous, as for me, and with such a small amount of text it simply undeservedly took the attention away from the main idea - the alternative life of a disabled person.
It also seemed to me that the relationship between the hero and his virtubovobnitsy were not fully disclosed. Yes, this is a game, and everything is simple there - immediately to the point. But the process itself could be shown more deeply.
End crumpled.
In general, my main remark as a reader was not disclosed. Neither the hero nor the topic. A good sketch, a good idea, but unfortunately there is some incompleteness, and it was she who prevented me from plunging.
I hope that in the future you will be able to more successfully disclose your ideas, prescribe the inner states of the characters, the course of situations.
Put 8. Advance)
Comment on publication: Bland face. Part 1
I think that we can continue)))) A doll getting dusty in a box can get bored ;-)
Comment on publication: Changing the rules of the monthly Competition
I support))) I still remember how in the very first month of appearance on the ST I immediately got into the top three, with an honorable 2nd place, although my story appeared right at the end of the month. It was incredibly pleasant to feel the victory, precisely because I was a newcomer. It was my victory at the opening that gave me to understand that I want to stay on the resource and make it the main platform of my work. Let others, if they are worthy, understand that there is a fair assessment system, not a promotion policy.