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Comment on publication: My beautiful lady
argumentum ad hominem and further:
You can evaluate and need exactly as much text as you read. Just report it. Otherwise, how do you manage to master a huge number of existing texts? You do not read everything to the end. Choose. What is the principle? Start reading. Do not like it, close. Like - read exactly as much as you have enough interest.
Comment on publication: My beautiful lady
I can not be offended. You will forgive me.
Comment on publication: My beautiful lady
What a fool I am. I did not read the story, I contradict myself and still want something.
Comment on publication: My beautiful lady
I wanted a conflict. And so, everything just turns out. The girl herself builds her eyes, agrees with everything, goes to an unknown man home at the first meeting ... And what if he is a maniac? Where is the realism?
I do not argue, this is possible, but you, as a writer, could at least prove that the girl internally broke.
I did not read further.
Comment on publication: Scavenger Chapters 6-7, epilogue
It was unpleasant to write. At some point, I chose the wrong vector. It was necessary to really draw a hero who seeks to help these girls, increasing their self-esteem, searching for partners for them, for example. Although this is implausible: these girls want one love, not such strange help. And who agrees to sleep with them for love, except the scavenger?
To tell further in detail how the scavenger seduced Katya, how he was arrested, tried, how his prison guards raped him - this is not a cake. At first there was the idea of falling in love with the Scavenger in Katya. But this is doubtful. In short, in two words: I'm tired of this nasty type, which I myself created. I have lots of ideas, I'll think of something else like that.
Comment on publication: Scavenger Chapters 6-7, epilogue
Perhaps this story will make some readers think that it is impossible to force a partner to something he does not want. It will show how blackmail works with love, something that we sin so often. Not in such a hypertrophied form, of course. Will show selfishness in relationships.
Comment on publication: How to make a wife a whore. Part 9
Anna Karenina - sexwife LOL!
Comment on publication: Last wish
She laughed heartily. Thank! The ending really can and should have been pulled. May be. But the rule was this: 5 thousand characters with spaces. And here it is already 5100.
In addition, your style turns everything into a farce. I have more drama. I want to feel sorry for everyone.
Comment on publication: Scavenger Chapter 5
Thank. Ulcers - acne, treated. I leave the opportunity to make a swan princess out of an ugly duckling :)
You can want and sick ... If she, for example, divinely plays the piano or sings like an angel.
The scavenger gets either dozens or edinichki. There is no third.
Comment on publication: Right to left
Unrealistic dialogue ... Women will never communicate like that. Teenagers in their fantasies, thinking of women, yes.