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Comment on publication: Babymaker-2. Chapter 2: Sweet Revenge

I like it.

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

From the European Union (:

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Comment on publication: Ksenia-whore

The idea is good, but it is written too softly):
Few details, little emotion of the main character.
It is necessary to fantasize too much for the story to bring pleasure, unfortunately these are not works of art where it is required (:

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

It would be great, the following 2 parts due to the absence of editors and stuck for a whole year (:

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Comment on publication: Katya. Toys

Not bad, but not enough :)

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

(: Thank.
The plans have no such quick action. The main idea is that the heroine is afraid of her parents and at the same time begins to corrupt, hiding it from them simultaneously.
For part 3, something is planned on the topic of what was in the dialogues with friends, or maybe not, depending on what happens in 2 parts.

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Comment on publication: The Looking Glass. Part 9

What was that just about? o_o

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

It would be great if you would demonstrate one of my paragraphs that were not finished, and how to fix it is better, any simple variant. It is easier for me to understand in which direction exactly to correct when I see how it should be.
Thank.

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

I apologize, apparently my story, is really so horribly written that this moment was missed by you: (
But the phrase:
““ Yes, there’s a problem with sound isolation, ”thought Christina and listened to these voices.”
I tried to convey the meaning that the two toilets for men and women are separated by a thin wall, or the ventilation is so arranged that all sounds pass freely through the wall.

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Comment on publication: Christie. Part 1

Thanks, but:
1. This story has been re-read more than 10 times over several days.
2. In the Word, it was written (:
3. The rule is familiar.
Sorry, but you are asking for the almost impossible, for the author to whom the given language is partially foreign. I see no difference for some endings, for example, “i” and “e”. This helps the Word, but it is very difficult to find mistakes in the middle of words, when the beginning and end of them are correct, and their Word even fails in green.
But thanks anyway ;)

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