Beloved ex is not worth calling.
Looking again for meetings is dangerous.
One break can ruin your whole life.
The other is beautiful.
One year later, still not in himself,
Tormented, rushing, praying.
The second is quite grateful to fate
It blooms and does not remember the past.
One longs to rejoice with joy,
Which has sunk into oblivion.
The other is unpleasant jagging,
Keep your loyalty to votive.
One - holds holy places in memory
Where timidly kissed in the night.
To the second such naivety is ridiculous -
We were friends, met, broke up.
Do not wander through the old roads.
Treat heart wounds.
Heat relations can not be revived.
Unstable and brief novels.
Go crazy, a dozen flew.
I rated it at +6.
And why, try it yourself to say.
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Eugene, good morning! Once again, carefully read everything. According to the materiel, I had one remark. In the line “A single explosion can kill a lifetime” stress on the wrong syllable. I propose a replacement: "Farewell one life can be killed." Express, please your opinion on this matter. But the most important thing that immediately catches the eye is the verbal rhymes in each quatrain. And here a big problem arises: if you start changing them, you have to rewrite absolutely the whole poem, I don’t know if I can do it. What do you think?
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I saw the “gap”, well done. And corrected at times sneeze. The rest should not be touched, if it happened.
And you did not notice that the verse is completely uninteresting and does not cling or how? There is no scalpel here.
And the reader, if there is one, has the right to give a low rating.
And today I again went on a tour, read in the elect John Basmanov and Martin Borm. At the same time I read my first publications. God bother them. With today's experience I could easily polish them, but I don’t touch for the sake of historical truth.
Then I wrote with passion, but now I’m completely sulked. Printing shame embarrassing, but sensible to mind it. Like this. just start something and immediately cool.
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Eugene! Where were your first publications? It would be interesting to read. It seems to me that at the beginning of the creative way everyone writes with clumsiness and roughness, regardless of talent. In the excitement or state of passion, you don’t think about correctness, here the main thing is to pour overwhelming feelings on paper faster, to ease the soul, not to go crazy or not to burst from the surging. Edit past works, I think it is possible, if of course there is a goal and desire. It will be the first edition, then the second, then perhaps the third. As a result, there will be a retrospective of creative development. Will it be necessary for someone other than the author himself? When you start to ask such a question, you inevitably fall into despondency. This is also familiar to me, as well as the lack of worthy ideas. There are strong feelings - there is creativity, there are no disturbing emotions - clean sheets.
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How is this "where to read my publications"? Here, under my nickname and nowhere else. At the CT, a rhypomolet Eugene3 was born, from here he will go into oblivion.
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