Foreign to me obstacles and thorns
I am mad, zealous and angry.
Put me on your knees -
Free take off and lively.
Tie my hands with a rope
Plait braid of all.
With unprecedented agility, dexterity
I will break out hearing her.
Put the chains on the body,
She will belong to me.
Easy, artistically, skillfully,
Caress, selflessly loving.
I, like a mustang, strapped,
Suspend destructive load,
Achieve: I multiplied by strength
Behind her, I will start without thinking.
Close your eyes, smelling,
Dog faithful on the trail go.
Million shades distinguishing,
I will find my jewel.
Halturim habit?
Remember the multi-mouse with a guitar and his favorite phrase "And so it goes?" What, really go?
Here are your mistakes:
1. Foreign predrady and ternii
2. I will be her.
3. The million hiding back
Tell yourself what is wrong in them and try to replace it with a more appropriate phrase.
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Eugene, good evening! I report on the implementation of homework (work on the bugs, as written in high school).
Errors:
1. Foreign pregrades and ternies are alien - an extra syllable
2. I will be her. - rhythm failure
3. The backsight of a million different - an extra syllable
Corrections:
1. Foreign to me pregrady and ternii -> Foreign to me progredy doubt
2. I will be her. -> I will sing her
3a Million Dreadstroke -> Million Diffuse Motton
(Russian spelling dictionary:
Mil'on (instead of milli'on - in the transmission of dissent. Pronunciation, in poetry; mil'on of torments)).
3b. Million Distinguished -> Shades easily differing
Eugene, please express your opinion, especially on the third point. Thank you in advance.
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And what about the third? Shades milen and I immediately asked.
But in the first two words are better to change:
I am strangers ...
At the same time, the emphasis is placed on its rightful place "U",
And the sonority immediately improves.
Well, okay, the materiel has been corrected, but we should not forget about the meaning either. Here at least the first line. Its legitimate meaning - no obstacles scare me. Right? In your version, it turns out that I am far from obstacles, I do not know any obstacles. And this is somewhat different. Or how?
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Eugene, good morning! I mistakenly thought that the word "alien" emphasizes "s", so I put the words wrong. Of course, you are right: “I am stranded with obstacles of doubt.” The beginning was brutal.
Dictionaries give 3 interpretations of the word "alien": 1. Ustar. alien, distant. 2. having little in common with anyone, anything. 3. unusual for someone, anything, unnatural for someone, something. By 1 interpretation, the meaning of the line is incorrect (but it is obsolete), for the other two it corresponds. But, you, again, are right, if left so, then at least some ambiguity will remain.
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I can not fail the dog
And the sharp fang will not let me down.
Through all the obstacles to the fight proherachu
To the beloved, that he has been waiting for a long time.
I am a faithful dog, my slogan is simple:
- I do not like to pull the goat by the tail.
Fate prepares evil trials:
Such a horror that does not collect bones.
I will carry everything for sweethearts confessions
I will tear everyone into a thousand devils.
I am a faithful dog, my slogan is simple:
- I do not like to pull the goat by the tail.
Love in the soul burns like the light of sunset
And brightly illuminates the difficult path.
We love, we are not guilty of anything,
Neither slow down nor turn away.
I am a faithful dog, my slogan is simple:
- I do not like to pull the goat by the tail.
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Sadness passes into blind longing,
Replaces anxiety and boredom.
I should rather return to Moscow,
Lick a greedy dog her hand.
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