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Comment on publication: According to the covenant of the Major Arcana or Bet with a maniac
It was the adjustment that I wanted to ask for directly))) Now Lenka nervously smokes to the side in an embrace with the former))) Nefertiti, thanks))
Comment on publication: TOURNAMENT. Four stories
Nefertiti, you have achieved your goal)) Without reading your comments about what the author meant, I would never associate you with him))
I somehow forgot about the episode of divination — I missed the mystic))
But I like your fairy tales more! I love happy end))
Comment on publication: TOURNAMENT. Four stories
Actually, for me the labor of reading three stories in the subject of amateur fiction was enough)) And I somehow missed the moment where the conditions of the competition provided for a mandatory visit to the forum ... The fact that Nefertiti is the author, I guessed reading her last but one message) ) Although there were doubts - she walked away from her style))
Comment on publication: TOURNAMENT. Four stories
Corrected the answer - and knocked out the Internet)) in order did not work)
I understood this moment differently: the Oncological Institute summoned her to the Lenkin office, where he temporarily lives in the absence of the bosses. That is. Lenka took away her husband, went around in office, and now the new boyfriend from Lenka is in submission ... well, the prospect is not good. Perhaps the author meant a higher position of a maniac, but in the text there is not a hint of it)
On the third question: IMHO, the first story just looks like a soloist among the same type of competitors. And another thing: for me the category “mystic / fairy tale” is presented somewhat differently, the story about the maniac is more likely written in the style of the female novel, but he doesn’t draw on fiction. But this is again my humble opinion, based perhaps on dislike of amateur fiction))
Comment on publication: TOURNAMENT. Four stories
I will answer in order:
“Though Lenka is not, apparently, IO will play a strict boss out of himself. I wonder who I see there. By the way, I could have entrusted this business to me. ”- from this phrase I conclude that IO is not superior.
Comment on publication: TOURNAMENT. Four stories
I don’t want to offend anyone, but for me this tournament looks like, “what is more delicious - dumplings or three different salads?” After reading the first story, I didn’t expect EVERYTHING to be about intergalactic adventures ... To be honest, I had to exclude the first story from the tournament - then everything would be fair.
Personal preference points: 1st - 9 points (at the end, it turned out that her “maniac” was just a temporary acting boss-rival; if he were a little higher in the hierarchy ...), 2 - 6 points (well written, but I didn’t like the rape scene), 3rd - 7 points (reduced for a long fight and a strange ending), 4th - 7 points (for erotica - a erotic - one could develop a theme ... for an amateur). Something like this.
Comment on publication: Nephew. Part 2
Very cool written! Although the topic of incest, in principle, I do not like, but some of the stories (including this one) are wonderful! Author, you have a talent - how can you write such high-quality stories so quickly? A gradual increase in tension from the very start, an open final ... I look forward to continuing!
Comment on publication: Personal motivation. Part 2
))) I wrote about the first part of Tolstoy's quotation! The fact that in our time and you can be happy in different ways !!!))) For some, happiness is children, for someone it is travel, for someone it is the same career, for example ... Opportunities we have more now than they had in the 19th century)))
About the future of Romeo and Juliet perfectly showed the heroes of the film "What men talk about")) Better, probably you can imagine))
In my personal example, the chronology is different than in the story: first we got married, then I became a teacher, and then the need arose for a second higher husband ... but I read the couple to him)) It’s a pity that I can’t let my friends read them - I will definitely associate Myself with the heroine's husband, and I didn’t write him to him)) Or rather, separate, tiny details ... In general, I’m offended))
Comment on publication: Personal motivation. Part 2
The quote of Tolstoy about happy and unhappy families is valid for the 19th century, but not in our time, IMHO. Agree, now there are more opportunities to be happy in different ways.
As for the families, “she is a teacher - he is a student” - I also have enough of such examples (including my own - so be it, I’ll reveal the cards). True, most of the “students” were, of course, external students, or the second higher education ... that is, quite adult people, and the institute simply became a place of acquaintance. Although a couple of stories with students of the hospital were also, one of them ended in a quick divorce.
Any happy ending can be spoiled if you dig deeper. For me, at one time, the continuation of the book “You Never Dreamed” was a great disappointment - but what a beautiful love story was in the first part! Therefore, as Twain said, a novel about adults needs to be finished at a wedding)))
Comment on publication: Personal motivation. Part 1
Thank you very much, it is very nice to see such positive reviews))