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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 8

And so with the story over! Another dozen and quickly go over the pluses minus.
- A little alyapisty beginning. And to be more precise, the first chapter. Confused description, an attempt to immediately touch on a lot of completely different topics in a long introduction. But already from Chapter 2 onwards everything develops very interesting and dynamic. I do not know why it happened, maybe they just “overclocked”.
- Again, I’m getting the last barrel organ ... You brilliantly describe the death of the weaker sex, the scientific effect of the virus, its nature, and then sex scenes. There are no complaints to the action itself, but the slang words spoil the picture. You just need to edit a little and everything will look at the highest level.
- The plot is not to say that struck, but read with interest. You touched on a lot of different topics, quite well opened them.
- In general, I really liked it and I am glad that I found such an interesting author here. Your work is the best I've read here. Thank you for your hard work! ;)
P. s. the bloodbath at the end amused me ... Perhaps it was not worth calling the ZFVS, but somehow differently ... Red stars on dreadnoughts ... ^^

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 7

Perhaps, frankly, in its not so extensive baggage of read books, watched films did not meet stories with the same idea.

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 7

The author’s funny approach to humanity since the first chapter. Planet of the Japanese, Chinese, Russian. It is logical that the conquest of space will go together and all the features of the peoples will be erased. That is, assimilation will take place, and the race itself will be perceived as a big cauldron from different nations.
Read on ...)))

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 6

Funny little chapter devoted to the final corruption of a kitten. ^^ Again, I see no point in dynamics, if the author singled out such a small chapter, then what kind of dynamics should there be? Sharp plot twist? "Wedge" during sex? Al unexpected drama ... The main character fell asleep ...
I'm already beginning to be afraid ... Isaac Asimov ... Three laws ...

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 5

It is not necessary that all the chapters are equally dynamic, as you imagine? =)
And yes, I am also afraid of the battle of the infuriated Vita and Angela ...)
Of the minuses again for himself noted vocabulary of sex.

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 3

It's gorgeous, just gorgeous! If in the first part I still found jambs, then they simply do not exist. Well, maybe a bit too much brute force with the corruption of a young hare, but as it were necessary))))
Well, the executioner is something like this ... Quickly leaked it, although until I see guts on the floor or a cold corpse in space I will not believe. It is simple if it was necessary to damage the ship, it was also possible when flying away ... And so it was possible to bend under the executioner and heed his orders ... Well, lan, you can see better ...
Fembots were described and the virus is just arrr! The beauty for me, a man familiar with medicine.)) In general, everything is cool and sex is now not superfluous, as he was in the beginning!

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 2

With such gorgeous sex, I generally forgot about the plot, bravo!
Straight very, very cool, fast, wow! Of the minuses, I can only poach some words that I don’t like, such as cock and so on. And so 10 in the piggy bank.

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 1

Your position is understandable.) My humble experience has shown that even the complete absence of eroticism, let alone porn, still finds its reader ...And this is despite the focus of the site.

I write as I want, not trying to please someone, only myself. If I don’t see porn history in history, then I don’t try to shove her there. On the other hand, I have stories / future ideas that include the presence of a plot with fairly detailed descriptions of sex.
I do not know how you thought out the idea. From my bell tower, it seems that at first they have thought through all, well, or most of the story, the main plot twists, characters, and then shoved sex. The sex itself looks as harmonious as a glamor motherfucker can look like in the company of drunk people. And one more fact, most of the chapters have a “non-porn” label. =)
Okay, I will read further, I'll tell you there already.)) Do not be offended if anything ...) I try to tell the truth.

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Comment on publication: Fight for the future. Chapter 1

Walk on what I liked and what did not.
- For me personally, sex looks inappropriate here, even though it is good, but then you could write one story purely with fuck, and this one with an interesting plot. And if they wanted to endure an interesting story, then everything could be reduced to light sex, closer to erotica.
- Slang vocabulary cuts off hearing. If at the beginning it is quite sublimely literary, then further the words “fucker, cock, vaginal estrus, etc.” all spoil. Again, returning to the relevance of sex, the more so detailed.)
- In some places inappropriate words, phrases or crooked descriptions ... Especially when you touch on complex topics. For example, “the future” is Unfortunately we are not a pro to write masterfully. = (Pros.
- It is very interesting to read, quite at the level of normal fiction. I have read only the first part so far, but I have no doubt that it will be even more interesting further. I hope that I will not be disappointed.
- I liked the idea with the firebots, their representatives were very excitedly described.)) There is an idea that Witt herself is a representative of their “race”.

Again, all that has been said is my IMHO. ^^ But the story hooked, I will read further.

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Comment on publication: gold fish

I take fashion to write about the pros and cons, so I will continue.))
- 1 I didn’t like the idea of ​​writing at once from the side of two persons, it confuses and strains in some places. It seems to me that the story from one actor would be more harmonious.
2 At the beginning, a little prolonged, especially noticeable in the dialogues.
3 A little tired of the stereotypical images of GG, but it is good that they are not completely like that. Although I’m shocked that you wanted it.)

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1 Towards the middle, a story develops very dynamically, emotionally.
2 Coolly described scenes seksya, sensual, erotic.
3 Like the language, easy to read.
4 And the story is cool. ^^ 10 to the piggy bank

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