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I told you how little fuck you have. "Gherkin" so she called and we laughed at it.
The blood rushed into Sasha's cheeks. He took a step towards the chained Nikita.
“And you know that she wanted to divorce you,” he continued, “She said she would file for divorce as soon as the school year ended.” That she is already tired of your little “pencil” to death, which you do not really know how to use.
With a flaming face, Sasha, forgetting caution, approached Nikita, raising his fist to strike. After waiting for him to come close enough Nikita free legs that was the strength moved him to his lower leg.
He choked back on the prisoner, gasping. Without losing a second, Nikita butted anyone in Sasha’s face by breaking his nose. The executor barked away from him, sparks spilling from his eyes. Another kick came right on Sasha's chin. He rolled his eyes collapsed unconscious. The gun when falling fell under the bed and, describing the arc, froze there. To get him in their position was impossible.
But Nikita did not lose his head.
“Baby,” he turned to Vicky, who from recent events had even forgotten about the pain and burning sensation in her body, and opened her eyes to watch what was happening — I had a phone in my pocket. I can't get to him. Try to take it out and give it to me.
Vika as a snake began to crawl to the battery. Wild pain was given in the whole body, hands felt as if they were drinking with a blunt saw, but she didn’t have time for that now. Crawling up to him and turning her back to his pocket, she began to pull out the phone. After a minute, a cool object slipped into her hand. Having rolled over Nikita's legs, she pulled herself up to his chained hands and somehow managed to pass the phone.
Nikita was finally able to dial the coveted number and call his people by turning on the speakerphone.
“We have little time,” he said, “this bastard will soon wake up, and then we will have a cover.”
- I understood - his friend said - we will be there soon.
Vika sat breathing heavily next to her, her back to the battery.
- Baby wait a little more, we will soon get out of here.
Ten minutes later, Sasha began to move on the floor. Vika clung to Nikita in horror. She was shaking.
Sasha was cursing trying to get up. Blood streamed down her face from a broken nose. He began to look around for a pistol. But it was too late. There was a crash. These are the people of Nikita burst into the apartment breaking the door.
- Glory - Nikita shouted - cut down that bastard.
A strong muscular man walking ahead (apparently the main one) quickly understood what was happening. One sharp blow and Sasha again went to Nakout.
The keys to the handcuffs were in his pocket and Nikita was finally able to part with the battery.
Rising, he grabbed the first jacket that came along and covered naked Vika.
“Nekit, what are we going to do with this Chekatilla,” Slava asked, nodding at Sasha.
- Wait, now we will understand.
Picking up Vick, he carried her into the room away from prying eyes.
- It will hurt. Be patient - he said, clutching at the needle that was still sticking in her nipples. The girl nodded.
He pulled out the needles one by one, each time the girl cried out unable to restrain herself. He had blood on his fingers.
Unwinding the scotch, he pulled a rag from her mouth, then untied his hands and feet.
- Do you have hydrogen peroxide? - He asked, looking at the traces of the wire on her hands.
“In the kitchen,” she said wearily.
Rummaging in the lockers, Nikita was able to detect a vial. When he returned, he treated the abrasion peroxide on the hands and feet of the girl, as well as her nipples.
- You still get dressed. And we will decide what to do with your hubby.
- What will you do with it? She asked quietly.
“I don't know yet.”
Nikita is back in the room. His people crowded there (five people in all). Sasha was still unconscious.
“So what did you decide?” - Glory asked him.
Nikita looked at him.
- Call the police.
- Do you want to pass the "cop" "cops." - Slava grinned.
- It's not for long.
Half an hour later, the police arrived. By that time, Sasha was already awake and was tied on the floor, with a gag in his mouth and a bag on his head.
In order not to attract unnecessary attention to themselves, all four other mercenaries retreated from the apartment. Only Nikita, Slava and Vika remained.
The interrogation took about two hours. Vika was sitting and exhaustedly telling how her husband learned about the infidelity and what happened afterwards. On her cheeks were still traces of the tightly rolled tape.
People everywhere in the uniform scurried around (many of whom Vika knew personally) and searched the crime scene. Sasha was taken away. At parting, he looked at Vika and smiled mischievously. The girl turned away, she could not calmly look at his face.
After the interrogation, Nikita took her to him and they were finally left alone.
- What are we going to do now? She asked, sitting on the couch.
He drew her to him and kissed the red marks of scotch on her cheeks.
- What they wanted before all this ... we will be together.
He poured her a glass of some kind of solution and made her drink.
- What is it? She asked.
- Painkillers. It was very useful to me in due time.
The girl drank.
“Go to bed,” he said. “Tomorrow, everything will be all right, let's think it over.”
The investigation took three months. Sasha was convicted for a term of 25 years, and was deprived of all the powers of a police officer, without the right of recovery.
Vika moved to live with Nikita in his apartment and, as she dreamed after graduating from the institute, began working as a journalist, cherishing the dream of going to work in America.
- If I still go there, how would you react to this? She asked.
“I will go with you wherever you want, even to the North Pole,” he answered.
Nikita himself got a job as a chief of guard for local business tycoons, and rather quickly built his subordinates, and won the respect of the boss by becoming his right hand.
As for Sasha ... Two years later, he was found hanged in his own cell, an examination showed that before his death he was raped and beaten. Vika never knew about it. Nikita still used his criminal connections.
P. S. I would appreciate comments. What you liked, what you did not like, what pluses, what minuses.
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I do not like that the husband was responsible for everything, although the fault was on the wife-whore. If you love another divorce and fuck. And in the state, when he learned about treason, many would have done so, and given 25 years for what? For drugs do not give so much.
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Well, about the many you exaggerated, I think. Such cruelty can hardly be justified by the fact that the wife cheated. Although the wife is certainly not the best. And about the time ... I'm not a lawyer, of course, but ... rape with the use of torture, attempted murder, beatings, taking hostages ... in my time it is quite appropriate.
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Capture are you laughing? The beating and the attempt is one and the same, just the second stronger article. He faces a maximum of 15 years, and then so much would not give years 5-10 on the force no more. This is firstly, secondly, you have only husband out of all three heroes. I will explain. If you look from the outside, he did not betray anyone, did not change, behaved remarkably, saw the change in his wife for six months and was silent. He made plans for the future, and here he finds out that the whore's wife is cheating on him, does not like him, wants to get a divorce, laughs at him. All his plans collapsed and he is not to blame. The wife is a clear whore and does not leave her husband and fucks with her lover is a negative hero. Nikita is like a man. but as a matter of seriousness, it immediately merges, she offers him to be together, he thinks you may want to stay with your husband. If you love to take away right away, and then he was seduced, he fucked her violently, fell in love with herself, especially if she was married, well, this is not a man's deeds. Well, if the passion at once, and so too, it turns out the bastard. And in the end it turns out not a happy ending, but some sort of garbage.
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As for Nikita ... you say they say he merges. Where and when did it merge? He simply offered her the freedom of choice, either he or her husband. You always forget about what Nikita himself was and what he was by profession.Perhaps it is not too striking in the story, but many of their doubts were reduced to just this. What a happy future can there be with a man whose job is to kill and fight ?. Nikita understood this and partly thought that sooner or later Vika would still choose her husband, especially since he was not completely sure that she had already fallen out of love with her husband. How her husband looked like Nikita didn’t care at all, he was worried about what Vika would decide.
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As for the husband, you could agree with you on all but one thing - he, too, could have acted differently in this situation - having learned about the infidelity just to throw her out of the house along with things, and not to arrange a torture chamber. Regarding the ending - happy end was just not going to do. There were just two options, either Nikita and Vika together or not. It was certainly possible to make so that the husband would shoot them both, well, that would have been too obvious already.
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And if the husband did not know, they would have met 10 years, and then the old men left her husband? You yourself wrote, Nikita sees a woman wants to be with him or not, and here he gives a choice, here he is not sure, this is plum. I can understand my husband from the human side, these two are not. Where raped her? When she did not go to the institute because of his example, he forced her to have sex. He does not love her once gives a choice.
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In the first 10 years, they would not have met in any case, for the simple reason that the girl had already decided to divorce. Secondly, I still don’t understand where you from Nikita saw violence to a girl. Yes, he was tough in sex. But I repeat once again. The girl herself liked this sex. She herself buzz from this catch) What is there unclear? Thirdly, if he gives her a choice, what does it mean he does not love her? And what he had to bang on the table with his fist and say "I do not fuck, what do you think, you wake up with me and only with me." Awesome love nothing to say)
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And about the time ... In general, initially, I just wanted to “give” him 15 years, but considering that my husband did too hard, plus Nikita has very good connections and money ... 15 years did not seem enough for me.
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In general, you failed to make a bad hero a good one, and a good one a good one.
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In general, I did not try to expose someone else, I wrote that it occurred to me. Well, if you see these heroes like that for God's sake. I will explain how I see. Wife - initially just did not intend to change, just fell in love with another meeting by chance. If Nikita himself would not have pushed her to this, she would not change it at all. Where did you see Nikita fucking her forcibly? The girl just liked this sex, and I mentioned this already. Why didn't she divorce right away? Did you forget who Nikita was? What did she really know about him? At first, nothing, and then when I found out, she did not give her confidence either. She did not know whether Nikita himself wanted a serious relationship, and for this reason she did not dare to divorce, but she could not leave Nikita because she loves. Laughing at her husband, she did not laugh, Nikita said it specifically to put him out of himself and he lost vigilance. As soon as Nikita let her know that she was ready to try to start a relationship, she made a decision about divorce and would have divorced if her husband did not know everything himself.
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Right husband did in general
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I hear from a ram
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The story is very good. Only the ending pumped up a bit. Therefore 9 out of 10
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Thanks for the assessment, but I would like to be specific. What exactly did not like in the end?
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The ending is crumpled, like a report and not a story.
One could give him 10 years, but there was no murder, not even a single shot, so that only torture was a threat, and even that was affected by the affect.
And there is no need to spend connections on the judge in order to increase the punishment, if in the plan there is still execution in prison.
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Well, yes, in terms of spending communication on punishment, I agree) There is a slight flaw) And the fact that the crumpled ending simply did not see the point of rassusoliv. These fuck further, this one sits. What's next to describe? Although ... races ideas have appeared, hee hee wake to write further)
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I really liked everything. Even if changed, nobody deserves such cruelty. Husband is a freak and a sadist; pity they didn’t poke him with needles, but only raped him.
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the husband is the norm man, but these two heroes are deceitful bastards.
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I rarely write reviews, but I could not resist here. As for me, too much unnecessary cruelty from a previously normal husband is somewhat not suitable for this story. It was necessary that the husband was inattentive and indifferent to his wife, neglected her and was sometimes cruel (hit, etc.), and she should not be exposed to such a slut who, with a normal husband, runs to another. Then it would be much better, but overall I liked it)
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I agree with you. Initially, in general, that was exactly what was intended and, and I was not going to expose the heroine as a whore. I just cut out many of the dialogues and events before uploading the story. I did not want to load the reader with excessive reading. After all, I did write a porn story, not a highly artistic work.
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How would be easier to explain ... The stories are written relying primarily on yourself ... On life experience, a path in life, education ... Two main characters, if the word "hero" is suitable, to the lives of normal people - well, 90 percent, does not touch at all ... One rubbish - let's call things by their names, a freak in life - well, who is a normal person going to be a policeman? ... I generally think that garbage and criminals are one type of people - freaks, just for an inexplicable reason, everyone has become what became ... Second mercenary ... Even better !!! ... A hundred times worse than garbage !!! ... Baba whore !!! ... And there are no other wives in the trash ... That’s how the sadistic scenes are described, I believe that it was like that! ... In the garment there isn’t such a thing - this is the prose of life ... Is it a pity to someone? ... Absolutely not !! ... In normal people, it causes rejection ... Separately written sex scenes, a separate sadistic act ... Just two separate stories shoved one into the other ... As a result, "the theme of boobs is not revealed" ... Sadism drowns out porn at all !!! ... There are no tender feelings !!! ... It is funny to remember love and to remember ... After reading some kind of nasty feeling - it’s like shit came ...
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Did not quite understand what is meant by the "theme of boobs"?
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Secondly, you speak so much about the heroes as if they were living people) They say they won't go to the policemen, and all the more they become mercenaries ... Do you dislike them because one is trash and the other is mercenary? And if one was a librarian, and another gardener, for example, would they have aroused more sympathy?
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Ahhhhhhhhh, I partially agree))) completely partially! I have nothing against the police, even though I have some problems with them myself ... But you are too categorical (young?)))))) I will say more that it is the former policeman who knows how to hide a crime or acts against his will. This is normal, and the mercenary is brave and bold, but he, too, was mistaken, like the cucumber husband))) And the girl - she just stepped. I partially recognize myself in it, because because ... For falling in love with a guy, are you a whore? Nooo! But for the fact that fucked for her husband, a fool. Just a fool. Hence the result is fully consistent with the situation.Instead of talking about the foot in a relationship - the pussy decided.
In addition, with the rest of your shit point of view - I agree))))
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The author, your former nickname Alan sexton?
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former nicknames were not. this is my only nickname on the site
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Of course, I don’t want to offend anyone from the readers, but I just wanted to leave a comment as the author of the story and as the reader of many other stories. It is surprising morality of some readers of porn sites) Many people here did not like the heroine who sleeps with two men. Well, gentlemen, the Russian language is written the story belongs to the category of "Treason". What did you expect to read about? About the highly moral girl just now released from the monastery? Again, I do not argue in the story there is a lot of cruelty. But the story as you noticed belongs to the category of "Execution" and not "Romance". And by the way, I personally read the stories in which both the eggs were cut, choked, and they tore up the ass, and the dismemberment was, so my story compared to this is simply “Russian folk tales”. And this by the way applies not only to my story, but also to many other stories that I happened to read on this site.
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Pfff! Be indulgent ...))) Although cruelty is not peculiar to you! I made such conclusions from your story, how you frantically describe cruel actions ... Rather, your part of the pleasure is not physical, but intuitive and more emotional)
And yet, people can and want to express their opinion regarding your multibuckoff on fucking 8 pages, and this is enough respect at least. Now, if it were indifferently fuck, then you would have written - “Lyuyuyudiiii, aaaaauuuuu, are you all there? I am handsome, although I indulge in everyone with treshak !!! ”
I read only "my" subject, and also quite narrowly directed. And you know, I don’t like some stories, others like them, but they are all worthy, otherwise I wouldn’t read them! Paradoxically, but true. This is the whole emotional charm, to perceive the emotions of readers from their works and to play with feelings))) This is a kind of psychological game in which you are always Top)))) Okay, explain to you for a long time, especially from the perspective of the bottom, and it is not necessary. You excuse in vain, and this excuse is like self-justification. So you should not do it, at least not in such words) It is enough just to “joke” for everyone to understand.
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No, honestly, I was not going to justify myself. Maybe of course it sounded like that. I just do not understand the other. Why do people go to the betrayal section and read stories? Then to sit and rant about what characters are wrong there? What's the point? Like any reader, I have my favorite categories and unloved ones. In the unloved, I just do not go and do not read. Yes, I was not only watching it in my story. Also go into some kind of story about adultery, read the comments and you wonder. And thanks for your feedback) It was interesting to read)
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Ohhhh, don't dramatize! This is my feature)))))
People come and read. This is the main thing, the rest is their emotions. Rejoice !!! People read and start bombing at them) This means that it was you who managed to make you through your creativity experience both the negative and the positiv) And this is the whole life !!! If negative reviews are not pleasant to you, then do not make the heroes negative !!! You-afftor, you decide) And we read and experience everything that happens. described by you. If the reader is concerned, it means that you are perfectly using your talent in the network))))) Understand that the nature of a person (anyone) comes down to the psychological comfort of his personality. Rough and crooked expression, but I write without editing, but as it is.Therefore, to achieve psychological harmony can and really want! And the simplest (many choose, but not me) is to accept the position of condemnation, or the position of the majority, joining a larger group of moralists (ooo, damn it, and here about the group)))) It is much more convenient and psychologically more comfortable to go with the flow, Many deviations than to seek the strength to understand and resist the apparent herd instinct. And yet, there are people (most of them), and there are other people))))) Sometimes you should not listen to the herd, along with its leader, or shepherd, and drown in this pseudo-ordered, but in fact - chaotic stream, becoming like . Sometimes it is useful to look at the “other” angle, to draw conclusions or actions!
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And I liked it.
Author, you are well done. And the syllable is good, and the plot is, and not just potraushki. Hammer on detractors and write more) This is porn, it does not have to be true to the last line)
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Thanks for the feedback. At the expense of plausibility, I think so too. Personally, as a reader in porn, I appreciate how vividly the sex scenes were described, plus if the writer has a well-placed syllable and there is a nice plot, this is a nice bonus. Well, I really can’t sit and sort each character apart, and I’m not analyzing their psychology. For these purposes, it is better to read the works of Russian classics, but certainly not pornography.
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I agree with those who believe that the husband did the right thing and the wife got what he deserved. It is a pity that Nikita won up.
In my opinion, it would be worth banging him, and keeping his wife at home and continuing to punish all his life, inventing new and new punishments and torture, such as in the story of another author, “The Concept of Marital Loyalty”.
And then ... betrayed once, betrayed and the second. And what did you fight for?
And I liked the story, yes. Keep writing (and harder;))
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Thanks, i will do my best)
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Nefiga husband did wrong! Disagree categorically !!! What kind of nonsense - self-made vendeta?!?! I also changed the guy, and it also seemed to be a bit like the story in this author’s story, but my boyfriend forgave me, even though he beat my brain constantly ... Changing a girl is not a justification for such behavior. This does not hold, you need to do so, so that she herself wanted to be with him, but then you can gradually bring her to this kind of hard practice. And the psychology of relationships will be different, based on mutual pleasure, albeit with scrapping, and not on dull cruelty, which seemed funny to me! Yes Yes!!! The actions of the husband-hero in the story were just ridiculous)))) Twist - I don’t think there is stupidity and fucking insult. From this, and unnatural actions for him, causing not respect, but laughter ... If he loves, he will not allow the second and third level to be betrayed))) To love is not to say holy and blindly believe and trust. Do not hide behind these concepts. This is a very complex and many-sided disease, with its side effects, contraindications and overdose !!!
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I do not know. In my opinion it turned out such a love story) I see no reason to say that the wife is a whore. Isn't it her fault that she fell in love with Nikita? It seems to me in this story, as she is the main positive character. And the cruelty of her husband in any case is unjustified.
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Thanks for the tip) about the cruelty of her husband I agree one hundred percent
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She is a whore not because she fell in love. She is a whore because she cheated on her husband again and again instead of getting a divorce to leave with her lover. Remember the beginning of the text, where it was said about their marital life. And she lost it all just because ...What? Fell in love? And she did not like her husband or what? Want sex? And her husband did not give sex or what? I have always been amazed at such excuses by whores - “that he did not pay attention,” “that he paid too much attention,” “that he was too romantic,” “that you would not expect romance from him.” This woman had everything. Beloved husband, happy life, no money problems in the family ...
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Initially I read the story on another site, so I had to look for the author to say thanks.
I like it. The story exceeded my wildest expectations. I do not agree with previous commentaries, it is quite good for such a genre.
Dear Author, write more! I would be glad to see your following stories =)
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Thank)
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Mm yeah ... It must be digested. Feelings I will write later, there is a + and minus and a specific crap. Please, no offense, I'm just mischievous)))
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Honestly, there were ideas about the continuation of this story. Just do not know whether it is worth it) Maybe it will be superfluous)
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Wait ...))) I haven't even written my opinion yet))) I just answered some smart guys! I will write how to collect my thoughts)
About the continuation. Judging by myself. I have one sooo complicated and long story in which both mysticism and chemistry and love and passion and betrayal (and betrayal is very tricky, both in a dream and materialized and with “not He” but in appearance) In general, everything is too complicated, Subject in life, and another transcendental Theme is close to reality, borderline. At the same time, everything develops in parallel enough and the girl is lost periodically in reality and in reality that happens to the person (her boyfriend) and with his inhuman appearance changes him ... Karoche is the cruellest)))) not for the faint of heart, the scene of violence and sugary vanilla, Topic and all together in contrast. This is not a work of art, porno-sur. Okay, not the point.
The point is that you can take the plot to another direction and, for example, show a qualitative leap in development?)))))) Of the husband. For example, he realizes that he is a bad hero. Yes, he did everything badly, unworthily and too much, clutching at his head, he has an explosion of emotions. He breaks from love and at the same time he understands that this is not done with love and this is said in him by the wrath of resentment. All the same, he and his wife will fail in spite of everything, she loves another — a fact. He lets her go, peace and a long, cold goodbye. Further, the non-husband tries to pack up and suddenly a new baby suddenly appears. She is not like his ex-wife, but another. Slightly different. And here, he clearly understands that now he wants to behave not as just a vanilla little man, namely, Top and tries to try himself in a new image, which is absolutely His. But how will he behave with the new mission? To conquer, or immediately declare his intentions to control and subordinate her will to himself?) This is one of the options for turning a bad hero into a main one with a + sign. Or develop a pair of Nikita and Vika, but there I think that there is no point in promoting anything. So everything is clear. Peace-friendship-gum. And to go to the massacre of the cops over her husband - well, try yourself in a pidosnogo genre with the addition of cruelty, there will be no end of the fagot passive)))
In general, do not listen to me, I am too ambitious, arrogant and impressionable girl.
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Well, then I will not reveal all the cards, but I will still write the sequel. Thoughts just climb into my head, I want to throw them out. I do not know really what will come of this)
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And I also happen !!! It is a thought that doesn’t give rest, nor sleep, nor hang out ... As long as you don’t write or do it)))) From the series “I'll go do something bad”) And what is most interesting is that it’s absolutely at work also, just not porn at the exit, but a masterpiece! In any case - at least one capricious reader will be waiting for props;)
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I would still like to hear your opinion)
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Good story! Sex story-shit! For treason in some countries still kill both wives and lovers! Husband class!
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Reread your story again! And the second time I liked it more than the first impression)))
First, this story is very close to me. Not in specific characters, or actions, but in feelings. You managed to sooo accurately describe the whole epic of the moment when an exemplary girl falls in love with another guy. Dick knows why this is happening, and especially when everything is fine with his current boyfriend, there is always a more impudent hero ...) It's sad and happy at the same time.
Secondly, all the words in relation to the heroine - I personally sooo close. Word by word. Literally, you can assume that you guessed all affection for me)))) This immediately has to you)
Thirdly, the orgasm of the girl just as they wrote to me) Coincidence? - I don't think so!)))) I just read and understood that my orgasms, my sex, my life))) even though there are many fantasies!
In the fourth, not a word about love !!! It struck me deeply !!! I agree! Agree!!! Why words when so everything is clear in the senses. Words can spoil everything, exactly as well as strengthen to incredible sensations and tears of happiness.
You have a great style and elegant imagination, clear and to the details. Everything is very clear to me and clear! One thing that confuses is your devotion to anal sex!))) I can’t imagine ace, as such, without pain. And you have it right there butt-anal-insanity in its pure form) But I don’t argue - it turns me on to wet panties!)
The relationship drama is described perfectly, the husband looks funny in my eyes, there is no even felt BDSM, despite the abundance of hard practices (however, his desire and love for his wife - she felt this veil that dazzles the mind in his actions. It does not excite this girl, because that there is no longer feelings for him. A girl is not a whore, but dishonest and not pure (((Nikita is a male, alpha male!))) That's exactly his image that turns you up to dizziness))) Though he deliberately destroyed a couple, but also happens that simply could not refuse the girl. This is His half in life. I understand very well)))
And at the very least ... Still, this resource is for a merciless grief, and your story - pulls up higher, beats drama, attitudes, feelings, determination, strength and power, deeds and actions, psychology and emotions. So reduced, it feels, but I do not like stories of more than 2-3 pages, so it would be better to be divided into several parts. I do like this)))
In general, write more for me !!! (least)))
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Finally, wait for your feedback)) Thank you. In order to share the story you got to the point. Probably worth it to do, it would be more correct. The first part is devoted to the relationship of heroes, the second about how my husband learned about treason. Yes, and the nature of her husband would have to pay more attention. Well ... how it happened, it happened. Indeed, many scenes and dialogues were cut out, but otherwise the writings would not be on 8 pages, but on all 28) In the future, I will still try to divide the story into several parts. And about your feedback about anal sex ... He laughed for a very long time))) In a good sense of the word) I can’t do anything, I really really like the topic of ass sex) Everyone has their own favorite topics, I am not an exception)) )
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Kaaak is flattering that my review was so necessary and important to you))) I wonder why?)
Do you have a fuller version of this story? I would be very interesting to read)
As for anal sex ...) I confess to you in secret ...))) I have written oooodaaaa in three parts), dedicated to ac !! There is no other kind of sex, only ace, and not childish and cruel, not as vanilla as in your interpretation))) And this is on condition that I am practically a virgin in terms of sex in the ass ... Noooo ... Mentally there !! ! I'm delightfully funny, I know)))))
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I’m interested to read reviews from all readers) But yours are especially interested, because you answer in detail, on business, with humor and the most important thing that I liked is that you didn’t divide the characters into good and bad, you saw what you need to see. In the end, as I said, I did not try to make any of the heroes bad or good. Each of these heroes has its pros and cons, and then everyone decides for himself that they want to see pros and cons. After all, even here, as you can see, opinions are divided: some on the side of the wife, others on the side of the husband.Everyone judges from his bell tower, what is closer to him.
Regarding the full version of this story ... I admit honestly, I deleted it, only a part of which was unloaded remained. And just in case if in secret))) all my stories are uploaded on the site, these are excerpts from my one, hmm ... the work that is under construction. Finishing it is rather problematic, because there is no time, and there is so much scribbling that is enough for War and Peace.
I can even admit that the main narration of the work begins with the wrong characters in this story, they are not the only main persons)
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