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The crowd whistled loudly.
- Good luck friends! Shouted Yerk. - We will always be glad to see you in our backwater!
Under loud cries, the trio left the gate, leaving the walls of the town behind.
The Arico Valley met travelers with its landscapes. The mood was all elated. Erge told friends how he fought with rats in the mine and fought the giant. Those, in turn, how worried about him.
Towards the end of the third day, the towers of the castle of El.
The city was already full preparations for the upcoming parade. There were rainbow flags on the roofs of the buildings. Trees were decorated with colorful garlands. Entire flocks of dressed-up fairies were founded back and forth. Street vendors shouted loud shouts to buy a hat, an umbrella, or coral beads.
Nnadi and Erge, who had never seen anything like it, looked at everything around with interest. Olya, on the contrary, finally seemed to feel at ease.
Passing the crowd, friends were at the stone gates of the fortress.
Erge stopped and turned to Ole.
- Well, it's time for us to part. I can't ask you to go further with me. You have already done a lot for me. Thank you for everything, little fairy!
The guy smiled openly and sincerely, but still, Ole seemed, some sadness flashed in his eyes for a second.
Erge suddenly realized that he did not want to part with his new friend. During their long and dangerous journey they became very close. What was his joy when Olya said:
- Friends, the parade will be here for a whole week, the time I have a car.
And added in a whisper:
“They say Queen El has the most skilled dressmaker in the world.” I always dreamed of looking at her collection of dresses.
And blushed deeply.
Nnadi and Erge shouted happily. And almost strangled Olya in her arms.
The magician took a bag of magic powder from his cloak pocket.
- We should move away.
Explosion. At the same second, a barrier of stone slabs collapsed, freeing the way to the fortress.
The army of the queen, guarding the limits of the castle was taken aback. Hundreds of eyes went to the uninvited guests.
From the attic of a tall tower, a middle-aged woman appeared, dressed in a purple dress.
- What are you standing for, fools? Take them! - commanded Korolev.
The soldiers rushed to the attack.
- Oh, Holy Conchita, this is perfection itself! I would have sold my soul for this dress! - Olya babbled in admiration.
Nnadi struck the staff down. The first rows of troops scattered to the sides.
The rest continued the offensive.
Everywhere there were explosions and the clank of metal. Friends defended as best they could. At some point, the guards surrounded them on all sides, taking the trinity in a ring.
Soldiers triumphantly zagokatali and tongues.
- Bad is our business! - exclaimed Nnadi. - We ourselves can not cope.
- Magic whistle! - shouted Erge, groping for the sausage saving thing. The young man brought it to his lips and that there was a force whistled. And ... nothing happened.
The live ring shrank more and more. The edges of the swords almost touched friends.
Suddenly, from somewhere, a muffled hum was heard. It grew louder and louder with every second.
The guardsmen turned their heads, apprehensively. Suddenly, whole hordes of bees fell upon them.
The square in front of the castle was filled with shouts. The soldiers threw down their weapons and frantically waved their hands, trying to fight off insects. But against the stinging bees, even the Queen’s army was powerless.
It seemed that nobody remembered about the trio of brave friends. Taking advantage of this, friends rushed to the palace.
The corridors of the castle were empty, all the guards were in the square below, and the servants, obviously, hid with fear.
Free friends were passing from one hall to another.Finally, they stumbled upon a staircase that must have led to the queen's tower.
- This way! - shouted Erge.
Climbing up, they saw a massive door. Suddenly, the way was blocked by Korolev Al herself.
- Do not let you go! - cried the old woman.
Olya, without hesitation, clung to her hair. Korolev screamed and waved her hands, trying to throw off the fairy.
- Run friends, I'll hold her!
Friends with a swing knocked the door and froze on the threshold.
From the corridor still screaming fairies.
- Oh, what a gorgeous haircut, who is your hairdresser, will you introduce? And skin, skin what! Tightening or not?
- Get away from me, fagot!
The queen nevertheless managed to get a piece of hair out of Oli's tenacious handles at the cost of a piece of hair.
- Forgive my friends, did everything that I could, and yet, she has amazing hair ...
Nnadi and Erge did not utter a word. They were still rooted to the spot. The eyes were riveted to the wide carved bed in the middle of the room.
On the scarlet silk sheets lay a naked girl. Young cheeks ale a blush, hair golden waves scatter on the pillow. On the lips a blissful smile wandered.
An animal hung over the beauty, pawing her hands to the bed. Wool of the beast on her belly got off and hung in shreds. The long wolf tongue wandered over the girl's naked chest. A quiet sweet moan sank in an animal roar.
The lovers did not seem to notice the presence of outsiders.
- And, it seems, your bride is not too happy to be saved! - Korolev laughed behind Erge.
- Whore!
Quit Nnadi.
- Fu, also with a hairy such ...
Olya noted with disgust.
In his chest Erge pinched with unbearable force. Hands involuntarily clenched into fists. His heart was eager to plunge the blade into the throat of the one that had recently been called the beloved. But instead, he looked down, and silently went down the stairs.
The square was empty. Apparently, the bees did their best, however, they themselves were not visible.
- Well, friends, that ended our journey, did not have to save anyone.
Erge smiled bitterly.
- But I met real friends!
The young man put his palms on the shoulders of his comrades.
- Do we part like this? - Olya sobbed.
- Yes, alas, but now our paths diverge.
Erge nodded.
Nnadi sadly bowed his head.
Suddenly, behind them, a familiar buzz rang out. Trinity turned.
- Uh ... Friends, I'm sorry that flew away without saying goodbye. It’s just such a thing, bees from the neighboring kingdom are asking for help, a troll of some kind wound up in the forest, does not give anyone a passage, kills people, steals honey from bees. Well, I advised you, as the masters in this matter.
Friends looked at each other.
- Well, what, there is a thousand gold reward announced for his head! ..
All eyes went to Erge.
The guy looked serious. But after a moment, a smile lit up his face.
In the buzz of general cries of delight, hooting and the buzzing of bees, no one noticed how Olya peeked up at the sky and quietly whispered “thank you”.
This story is paired with another "What they are, after all, small"
Link to the first
https://eroticspace.info/story/2015-08-03/kakie-oni-vsyo-taki-malenkie-turnir.html
Waiting for reviews on this
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Well, "how small they are" I will not read, but amused the story, especially marijuana))) and succeeded in a joke about a hairdresser. A funny children's fairy tale, I liked it. refuse)))
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Urrrra! The first swallow, Snezhana. But you already otkazmenilas in the story)))
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This is more than the first one is suitable for a fairy tale (fantasy), but there was little sex, it was possible and not a direct description, but it seemed to me that the small inserts about what happened to the bride would have gone to court. Plus add a bit of flirting Oli with the main character
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Thanks for the review, Kalash. sure the author will take note of this. and if he writes a sequel, having already opened, he will correct)))
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I was only absorbed in the annual fayparad. Neighing. And the rest - with difficulty. Although, there is also a language and style.
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Che, thanks and on this)))
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Yeah, Nefertiti is puzzled)
I started reading right in such a sweet anticipation of an erotic tale. There is a heroine, there is a villain with a mother who stole her, there is a hero in love. I was drooling, starting to read. My adorable genre!
But I was deceived)))))
There was an amusing fairy gay who smiled at me, there were all sorts of road adventures that I read, empathizing with the heroes. Touched descriptions of the environment. Everything is just brilliant. On the top ten!
But, the author, I just want to bite you! Where are the explicit scenes ?! I did not see beautiful, and in general at least some love scenes, and even cruel scenes of violence did not show me. There was a hint of the hero's erotic fantasies, but you quickly turned them off. Is it worth the tag "not porn"? No, not worth it. Then why are you so? (((And then, what do you have with the ending? I personally had the feeling that you started writing with enthusiasm, swinging at a beautiful long tale, but then you got tired of writing. As a result, you crumpled the end. I did not understand whether the heroine fell in love with the prince, or if they pumped her up with something)))) In general, did this love really see the bride in the arms of another and immediately into the bushes? And the face to fill the opponent? And find out if she willingly went for it? In short, you have introduced me to serious thoughts. I puzzle how to estimate you.
Given all the disadvantages and pros, I put + 9 points and all dashki. And I want prody! Straight stomp leg and demand!))))
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That's the way to write reviews !!! Learn! If it were possible, I would put Nefertiti, adored by me, ten advantages, no hundred!
Almost with much I agree, my Queen. But it is not over yet, I will also leave my reviews for both stories, as I see them)))
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Yes, you got everything from your fuck: the six-winged, the family and others like him)) whose story am I upholding? Do not bother epta !! I am for this story !!! Muamua-Yuriku !!
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Thank you, Snowball! From me and from the author.
And from me chmokkkkssss in sponge alyya. Your candy wrapper)))
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So, what do we have:
- standard fantasy story about the journey of friends. Well, OK, the classics never gets old.
- the language is normal, literate. Without nutria.
- presenting the fairy parade, I smiled. Let's read for humor.
Now the cons:
- The topic is fucked. In the sense that even scanty erotic inserts are written to fuck off. I got the impression that the author (or rather, the author of)
composed a fairy tale for a child of 5-7 years, and then decided to post the creation on the Internet. But why here? And why not in "Not porn"? I had to grind out a couple of "erotic" sentences. Without them, the tale would look better.
In general, IMHO, the story does not belong here, but the hand does not raise a very low mark for the reasons listed at the beginning.
Therefore, 5 points.
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Excellent comment, sp415!
True typo in the sentence: "- the topic of fucking revealed.", I will assume that "not" missed)))
Thanks for the five. If you convert, there will be three with a minus in the school grade system)))
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No, it was I who tried to scumbler in conjunction with “fuck off”. Perhaps it was not very clear.
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But now it is clear))
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From me 9 for a few small flaws.
But first, the good.
The story is super, read in one breath, a great alternative to the Hobbit for overgrown children.
The little fairies with his fairies parade brought a bit of fresh, not haggard humor into the story.
Adventures are described from the fifth to the tenth, but they put a lot of action into 4 pages.
There is a plot and outcome of the plot, which is important in small tales.
Well, about the flaws.On the first page there were several errors, possibly related to the fact that the author is not Russian (or simply did not check the story). Then he got carried away and did not see any more errors, or simply stopped noticing.
The outcome of the plot hanging over the beloved wolf is somehow indistinct. Maybe it was worth at least talk?
There is no sex on a prono resource - and this is the main sin ...
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Great review, MIG! I would like to hear about errors. The story was checked by three people, including the author ... If it is inconvenient to write in a personal or right here. I will correct with the consent of the author.
Yes, I agree with many things. It is an episode with the wolf is not enough. The type of gun hung on the wall, and when the moment presented itself, it didn’t fire - the powder got wet)))
I also read in one breath and I want to continue. The ending hints at him))
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“The new people were silent all the way.” - they could be silent all day, all the way to the forest, but their journey lasted 3 days and they were not silent.
“The predator fell on the earth, took hold of it with his hands on the nose.” - one cannot fall to the ground. You can fall through the ground. Perhaps the author wanted to write "fell"?
Something was still from the same opera, not caught now. Therefore, I thought maybe Russian is just not a native language?
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Good! I will fix it! Thank you for pointing out the errors. I think the author’s native language is Russian. There is such a concept of mechanical errors. When you write one word, and think about another. The result on the face)))
I admit that I have many more errors, but my native language is Russian))
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Put a topic on the forum about the gender predisposition of the authors of this tournament
https://eroticspace.info/forum/threads/806/
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I admit honestly, for the first time I ran through the stories briefly, almost not catching on anything for a long time. But she put both on the top ten ... perhaps, rather out of respect for the authors who did not go the distance ... Later, I decided to reread it more attentively ... in vain I did it, now I have to comment on it ...
Well, well ...
Of the benefits:
This story is more like a fairy tale. All fabulous attributes are present. The main character goes to rescue his beloved from the clawed paws of evil, along the way acquiring companions who at the end of the path become true friends ... perhaps this is where the pros end ...
Although, we can still mention the original homo-parody of the fairies ... Respect the author, but ...
But for me personally, these fabulous creatures like, and such a free interpretation of their image somehow distorted ...
Some tale of narration is striking, where one scene turns into another not smoothly, but in spurts ... Apparently, from the desire to trample the length of the plot into the allotted format ... or the author, in the process of writing something distracted ... maybe to smoke magic toadstools for inspiration)))
Of the minuses, I would point out, the complete absence of positive female characters ... yes, in general, no, not even negative ones are spelled out ... A purely male party, diluted by a gay fairy, where women are only in ghostly visions ... and even in the final scene to show their meanness and insidious essence ...
The moral of this tale suggests itself:
Friendship won ... Strong, loyal and reliable, men's friendship ... and women are all soo ... and bl ...
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ABOUT! Eve is never easy Eve! Gracios for such a great review. From me a hundred advantages.
By the way, I didn’t care that women aren’t there as a class. Thus, they catch a glimpse of their existence and the purpose of their journey throughout this friendly Kodla.
however, there is some truth in your words. The author did not meet the required format and the story needs to be continued. However, I liked it a little more than the other, although he was written elegantly and in all respects has almost no error-errors.
But this is my opinion and it is probably wrong))
And I liked yours. Highly! If they were handing out medals to the best reviewers, then you and Nefertiti would be the first to rely. Only, what gold, and what silver, I do not know. We would wear it in turn))))))))))
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Oh, Eve, well done! Not in the eyebrow, but in the eye ... The forum beetle bites you sometime :)
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Do not bite! She is honest and fair! And many consider her reviews as excellent!))
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Eva +100500, here who really is not afraid to express their opinions.
The story is not mastered, I almost fell asleep.
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Thank you Bitch! Now go to the second one. Maybe you will like it?
https://eroticspace.info/story/2015-08-03/kakie-oni-vsyo-taki-malenkie-turnir.html
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Kament from the Guest.
“I read the story“ The Road to Arico ”... and inadvertently put a comment on Nefertiti minus. I wanted a plus, but on the tablet it was small and the minus was pressed. there you apologize to her for me ...
Regarding the story, there are some mistakes on the last page ...
In general, I agree with Nefertiti, there is very little eroticism, the Hero escaped, his feelings somehow crumpled up ... and the ending went somewhere in the neighboring region ... "
I apologize to Nefertiti on behalf of the Guest.
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Too feminine tale. It was difficult for me to read, not because the author wrote poorly, but because I am a wrong reader. - It has always been difficult for me to read female authors)))))))
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Strange statement? And I like how women write. My favorite comic Snezhana, Roksalana.
Nefertiti writes heartfelt romantic stories.
But everyone has his own taste.
And thanks for kament!
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“O, the Most Holy Conclusion, this is self-righteousness! I would have sold my soul to it! - enlargedly proliferated Olya. "))))))))))) !!! and, in general, the tale of the purest hihi-narrative))) It was funny to read - fantasy style (allows people with a sick imagination to draw different pictures in the brain;)), therefore, I note that I perceived it as something magically fascinating, but with a very crumpled end (in the cinematography this priyom is called “loot” is over)))), and at the author ... what was the end ... “magic powder”!?;))
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Guest, the author has long been all unfastened for the crumpled end. Would you bite him if he was a man or a whip on the bottom - if a woman, for the crumpled end?
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crumpled “pipiskku” smooth ironing))))
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Wordplay and pun)))
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yet we are all here from one sandbox;), and we are doing that, we add words from small letters)))))
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TOURNAMENT IS ENDED!
The author of the story Badun.
Read the forum
https://eroticspace.info/forum/threads/806/
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CONGRATULATIONS!!!
APPLAUSE !!!
You really surprised! THANK!
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