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Comment on publication: Toy "girlfriend". Part 6: Park
Maybe you should reread at least once before publishing?)
Comment on publication: Toy "girlfriend". Part 4: Thrilling Surprise
To be honest, the story develops very implausible. Right here at all. Starting from the first episode. BUT. The story always has 2 options:
1) close to reality, with the study of psychology and deployed characters;
2) full anril, trash and waste, but it excites so much that you understand that utter nonsense, but still it is interesting to read.
So here. This series, it seems, from the first letter no longer climbs into paragraph 1, but is knocking there persistently (for the author wants this). And for paragraph 2 is not enough. That somehow between dangles ...
Comment on publication: Record. Part 1
Somehow it starts to annoy, you open a new story, but it has the same beginning as in the previous ones - “I am a pretty blonde with an elastic chest in size N and tight ass”. The question arises - is this a story, or a personal matter? Describe the situation and its character of the heroine, and the reader himself thinks about the appearance. Read about the same type of dolls already somehow fed up.
Comment on publication: Pizza making rules
Not so striking, at least)
You are welcome)
Comment on publication: Pizza making rules
I liked the story) It differs from most stories on this topic and gives a view from a different angle, which is valuable. Although, in my opinion, the top in the story is a contrived character. But this is just my feeling.
Comment on publication: Start of the race. Part 1
But the idea was not in the amount of text, but in the potential of the idea itself.
Comment on publication: Start of the race. Part 1
1 story part 1) But maybe there I will add the second part too. The first one in the walk is based on a real story, there was nothing to be invented there, but in the second part of the walk it is already necessary to invent, because there will be only 1/2 pages of real events
But in the transformation is already a fictional story, written little by little)
Comment on publication: Start of the race. Part 1
For me, the potential of the idea is not revealed, and it is significant. But, most likely, this is a matter of taste and nothing more.