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Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 3
Of course, there are flaws. To deny anything is meaningless. But I left the white spot at the end of the story deliberately, offering the reader's imagination to finish painting the picture myself. But you propose to dot the i, so that there is no ambiguity in understanding the situation. I will try in the next story to set everything together. But the image of Eugene, I turned out not fully open. He is a strong and courageous man who loves his spouse, but in the story his image really turned out to be in the shadow. I will work more thoughtfully. And thanks again for your criticism. You instilled in me the confidence that you need to write further, and it is worth a lot!
Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 3
Special thanks to Oleg and Gosha MeDo. I think that comments are really needed for your work to be appreciated by. It is difficult to do this yourself, since this is your work and treat it accordingly. Although when writing there are moments when I do not like something myself, but with a lack of time, you leave it as written. Apparently, this is not correct. You are deceiving not only yourself, but also readers. And they are your main judges. It depends on them - to write you further or not. Therefore, he is very grateful to those who see flaws, writes about them, and nevertheless does not lower the author below the plinth. And, of course, thanks to those who simply support me with a kind word. Now there is an idea for a new story. While the idea over which to still think. Well, what happens - judge you!
Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 3
Thank you all for the comments. Your unanimous opinion suggests that the story was not very successful, and may not have succeeded at all. These are my first compositions. If I write further, I will try to take into account your comments.
Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 3
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Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 1
Good. But it will take time.
Comment on publication: Sanatorium "Forest Lake". Part 1
To be continued. I just wanted to understand - is it worth writing further?
Comment on publication: Bad bet. Part 2
Dear the thirteenth! Thank you for your comment and careful reading of the story. I will try to answer your questions. Exposure did not happen because the hero devoted all his attention to the actions of his wife, internally hoping that there would be no treason. When this happened, he was confused about whom to blame - his wife or those who did it. And only later by chance, compromising material fell into the hands and, he tried to use it. As for the second question, I have to agree with you - the wife should not have been so rash to do this, and here is my flaw. Although initially it seemed to me that she did this in retaliation to her husband, although she understood how this could end. After all, an insult is not always a good feeling. Thanks again, and I look forward to further disassembly of my future stories.
Comment on publication: Bad bet. Part 2
If only a little later. Now in line is the new story.
Comment on publication: Bad bet. Part 1
Thank you for rating.
Comment on publication: Bad bet. Part 1
Thanks, Aleks74, once again. I must admit that some moments are taken from the real life of my friends and acquaintances.I tried to bring them into one story.