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Comment on publication: Nika. Episode 1
Not bad. But the grammar should be slightly tightened.
Comment on publication: Artyom and Physics. Part 2
Pretty passionate. There are some minor bugs, but generally intriguing. The only thing I wanted to notice is that the name of the hero is somehow strangely changing from Artyom to Andrey. The rest of the story pleased. I will wait for the continuation.
Successes, the author.
Comment on publication: The waitress Anastasia. Part 1
Very lively and dynamic. The plot is not devoid of originality. I liked the story very much.
Successes, the author.
Comment on publication: Strange neighbors. Chapter 1: Irritable Intervention
I like it. Briefly, but the sense of humor. You, the author, need to write a sequel. Well, or lay it out, if there is already one. Criticism or advice taken early. What you wrote is a short prelude and no more. Such a small amount of information can say little, despite the fact that the first impression, I must say, is very pleasant.
Lay out the sequel and then listen to the criticism.
Successes.
Comment on publication: Dark forest. Part 3
A long time ago I read the first part. I was even slightly surprised to see the sequel. But I must say pleasantly surprised. A good development of the plot, mixed with explicit scenes. Waiting for the continuation.
Successes.
Comment on publication: The conference. Start
More appropriate, please. Criticism was quite appropriate, and perhaps even necessary.
Comment on publication: Happy new year dear friends!
Happy New Year everyone! It is very nice to see the most talented resource writers here. I wish all the authors more inspiration, so that the muse never leaves you, continue to delight us with your works. I wish you all happiness, health, warmth of love hugs, joyful laughter and execution of all ideas in 2015!
Comment on publication: Hot night in Pavlodar. Part 1
Are there so many Tatars in Pavlodar?
Anyway. The author, the description of the sex scene is pretty good, but in principle there is no plot, it was a little upsetting. Yes, and some moments were commonplace. In short, many have to work. But in general, the story is interesting. Continuing read.
Successes, the author.
Comment on publication: My sexwife. First episode
I read the dialogue Semenycha and the author. Well, more on that later. So far, according to the story. I have never seen such a sad description in my life. The author, I apologize, but you really have problems with the description, sometimes spelling, punctuation and of course the syntax. This is just a grammar box. Regarding the plot, he, sorry, zero. He is not in principle. The repetition of parasitic words, and the words that have no meaning, goes too far. The idiocy of the main character - too.
Now about the dialogue. Roughly speaking a monologue, since the author simply hammered down the keyboard with his fists, and then sent the writing. Semyonitch also tried quite politely (although I think it was not worth it) to point out the mistakes of the author. Last criticized perceived as an insult and went to the person. What probably gives out is not his young age, but rather not high intellectual development, this Semyonitch should have been taken into account.
Comment on publication: Unlucky Cinnamon and Lightning
I apologize, I turned to Anabel. Did not want to confuse.