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Comment on publication: Necromancer. Chapter 8
Good day, dear author. The story is written very well, the plot about getting man magical power is quite popular, but your cycle is the longest in comparison with other works of this genre. Description of bed scenes and the world, and the plot itself is extremely good. However, there are also disadvantages. The most significant of them is the character of the main character. All these his emotional throwing, in the end, not worth a jigger. He repudiates doing something bad, but later easily violates the word given to himself, you can all write off the influence of the necromancer's soul, but still read the eighth part about what a good guy is in his soul and how he is ashamed to do all these terrible things. , already annoying. As a result, the protagonist looks spineless, cowardly, narcissistic and arrogant voluptuary. The only logical end of this story is the capture of the body by the GG by a necromancer and his calm further existence in another world.
Sincerely, Lehman Russ.
Comment on publication: Skyrim. The adventures of the Grou-Mak. Part 2
Hmm, and by the way - a good idea) And everything is written quite competently, in general - a great story, keep writing.
Comment on publication: Thinking out loud. Toys of the gods. Part one
Um, I think that you can understand the author) For we all are waiting for the continuation of your wonderful series of stories, we think about what will happen next)
Comment on publication: Behind the walls of Scatterloft. Part 1: Snake Ball
That's it) For me too: 3
Comment on publication: Behind the walls of Scatterloft. Part 1: Snake Ball
Justify
Comment on publication: Behind the walls of Scatterloft. Part 1: Snake Ball
Great story, I wrote one here, I still write the second part: D is a very good story, but the standard, nevertheless, is the stories of Yakko-Khan)
Comment on publication: In search of knowledge. Part 1: Dark Forest
Thank you;) I will consider)
Comment on publication: Misa. Continuation
Listen, wolf, read my story, point out what my shortcomings are.
Comment on publication: Misa. Continuation
The wolf is rude, yes, but you still need to be open to criticism and take into account your mistakes. And do not be so arrogant, there are authors and better than you, for example, Yakko-khan. I liked the story, not bad, very much, of course there are some shortcomings that the Wolf has already kindly listed before me, heed the comments and you will be happy.
Comment on publication: In search of knowledge. Part 1: Dark Forest
By the way, those who give bad grades and so on. Argue, please, in the comments.