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Comment on publication: Complete finish

According to the results of three stories, what I want to say to the author in terms of real sensible criticism.
1. Motivation Aygun not disclosed from the word at all. The fact that her peasant has fallen asleep and she started this so-so motivation, a girl should have something more emotional in her head so that she can decide to change, this peasant only thinks with a member and the girls are more selective. Yes, and in the future can not see any experiences of this first and foremost humble and inexperienced wife.
2. In general, the story lacks all the same element of sensuality, seduction, emotions of the characters. That is, kakby on the one hand it is, but this is not enough for the story to hook deeply.
3. A strange name. Beginning of the End. The end. Next will be End on a stick?

In the good side of the story, I would write down the very idea of ​​the characters, they look interesting, although not normally disclosed. The author should definitely write further, because the story has other pleasant aspects, not strong, but pleasant.

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